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Hero Factory MOC: Daedra by Rahiden Hero Factory MOC: Daedra by Rahiden
This MOC was a relatively quick build, as per request by ~twisteddragon2, to make my version of his MOC Daedra. Come to think of it, Daedra is my third MOC built as per request (along with these two). It's not my best work, definitely, but there are some aspects that I like about him.

The original can be seen here. The concept is centred around the Phantoka ribcage, with a demonic style and Evangelion-esque build. As you can see, I've made my own alterations, most notably the tail.
Hope you like!
Hero Factory (c) Lego
Original character by ~twisteddragon
Designing, building, photography (c) Me
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:iconst3vethesquid:
Well to start with the focus of the moc, the chest is really well done! The angles of the HF parts mesh nicely with the angles of the technic.

The flexibility does not look too good overall. It's obvious you started with the chest, as the rest of the moc, while enough for the overall purpose, is lacking in comparison. Most notably the elbows, try to avoid that kind of joint orientation.

I know it's tough to work with mata red, I don't like to, but surely something else could have been done for the end of the tail. It ends rather abruptly.

Moving on to the legs, I really like the way you used the sockets as aesthetic on the knees, and the way you did it is very clever. But the gap between the knees and thighs looks awkward in just about any stance, so I think you could have done something else there.

In all, it has A very well-defined, impressive look, but some of the execution is lacking, where aesthetic was sacrificed for the ease of 3-5 part limbs.
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Let me start by saying, the overall build is fantastic. It's got a great overall shape, and good color balance, though at some point you lost whatever "Eva-esque" traits you were trying to foster.

As far as vision goes, you're working within a fixed "field" and you did pretty well within it. You maintained the color scheme, and kept the most important "part" of the design in tact. In this case, though, there's at least one trait that the original definitely did better, and that's the hands. While they're quite long on the original, they were much more claw-like, and have a more pleasing overall design.

When it comes to originality, you're usually one of the best. Within that context, though, not a lot of this is used in ways I've never seen done before. It's not "surprising" or "Challenging" by the standards you yourself set.

Before I continue, great job ignoring the pressure and actually using a (modified) HF skeleton for the limbs. Most people just do not have the guts to do that, and I want to commend you for your bravery on that front. That said, it doesn't display your "technique" at all, and between the generic claws and the really bad use of Mata feet, coupled with the needless inclusion of Stars feet on the shoulders do a lot to detract from the overall shape of the upper body.

Despite the overall weakness of the limbs, the MOC has an exceptional torso design, and the head leaves nothing to be desired. No MOC is perfect, but this one is fairly memorable.
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Emix2 Featured By Owner 6 days ago  New member Hobbyist General Artist
so creepy, but so cool. :)
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Unicron666 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013
Wow..
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sharperofthefew Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sounds like a girl name O3o
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:iconrahiden:
Rahiden Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:shrug: I hear it's a term from Skyrim, but I didn't know that when I made it. It was a request, after all.
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sharperofthefew Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh LOL
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DrFragger Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013
gad, I wish I could build as well as that. I've built a few of my own MOCs, but none turn out as good as yours or anyone elses.
>.<
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lauritz2001dk Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013
omg thats freakin awesme love the headcomb and the weapon faves
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:iconrahiden:
Rahiden Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks very much! :D
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Karda4124 Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The description should say Phantoka ribcage, by the way.
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:iconrahiden:
Rahiden Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ah, so it should. Thanks for pointing that out.
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Karda4124 Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ain't no thang!
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LegendWeaver25 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Do you still have this guy? Because I think you could put him in Hero Faffory as one of Nightmare's minions!
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:iconrahiden:
Rahiden Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes, he's still around. You've actually stumbled upon the exact way in which I'm planning to introduce him :D
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DoorStop1227 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013
I came back to say that I can't get over the coolness of this. :thumbsup:
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:iconrahiden:
Rahiden Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I have to admit that I don't really like the Daedra much anymore... the torso is the only area that I like, and a lot of the rest is just filler. It's a good thing that he doesn't use any useful parts, otherwise I suspect he'd be dismantled by now!
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DoorStop1227 Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Well, I've been playing The Elder Scrolls for like 8 years now... and it really does look awesome, in that perspective. XD
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LincolnAlgirWest Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAh love it, this is awesome. I remember when I was younger and all my Bionicle sets and how many creatures I'd make with them. This makes me want to start it up again.
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:iconrahiden:
Rahiden Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm glad you like it :D
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DoorStop1227 Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012
This is awesome! Are you not an Elder Scrolls fan? Also, whoever told you daedra don't carry weapons would be incorrect. They can have a number of weapons, including swords, maces, daggers, bows, staves, magic, etc. Gosh... if you aren't into Elder Scrolls.. I highly recommend it, I think you'd love it, it'd be a great source of inspiration. Could you do.... a daedroth??? :D
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Rahiden Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Skyrim is one of many things in which I would be very interested, if I ever got into it ^^; In fact I'd never even heard the term 'Daedra' before twisteddragon2's request, so I just assumed it was something he made up. In the meantime, though, I'll have to keep further requests to a minimum - I have a finite time to get my own projects done, after all! Sorry to disappoint.
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:icondoorstop1227:
DoorStop1227 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
Ah okay. No, its fine, I used to take requests on my old page and it just got out of hand.
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Greatbeing Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Sweet use of rawjaw
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Sagitari-Seiza-1213 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow…that is wicked cool! The Tridax holder (is that the right name?) was a nice touch. :clap:
Say, do those hand claws come in gray or silver? I think I'd like to use them in Koru's concept sketch.
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Rahiden Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah, those claws come in a few colours ( [link] ), but bear in mind that I only have them in red and gunmetal (or as Bricklink prefers, 'pearl dark grey').
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DEVILMAYIZE Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Student Filmographer
:iconepicclaplz: AWESOOOOOOOOOOOOOOME
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123-Kitsune Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Way Cool!
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JeremyX2000 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
:iconhokaiplz: AWESOME!
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grindARTstone Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
grind is jelly.
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mr-shazam Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
looks great but the legs seem too thin and the forearms look to exposed. By the way, the head and torso are just perfect
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3rdeye88 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Maybe its just my imagination, but it seems like yours, mine and Alex's styles are kinda bleeding into each other. I've had a lot of "that seems like something Alex/Aiden would do" moments with my MOCing. This one has some stuff that kinda looks like what I'd do on a MOC, Keep the Aesthetics, but where needed leave some space for articulation. I agree with Alex and Zach that the legs look a little thin especially the thighs. They have the red armoring, but I think what it needs is a little more meat on the back, if possible.

Its nice to see a MOC come from you out of the blue. We don't get that as much these days.
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skull123246 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
As usual, incredible work with the overlapping and blending of pieces. It has a nice natural look to it. :D
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R603 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice!

Although the person that made the request is wrong unless if it was a certain daedra that he came up with in particular, all daedra carry weapons. HAS HE NOT HEARD OF OBLIVION OR SKYRIM?!? However if it is one he came up with that is not a regular one than that's fine.
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Rahiden Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'd never heard of the word 'Daedra' before he mentioned it, so I just assumed it was something he made up ^^;
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Vedkarrtheunbroken Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
actually, Daedra usually do not carry weapons, only 2 (and a few of the godlike daedra) all the rest have no weapons, robocop was reffering to a Dremora, not a daedra.
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R603 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That's alright, I'm not mad.
When not constructed as a bionicle, a Daedra without a weapon [Its rare that one doesn't have one.] looks like this.- [link]
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Unleashed-Fear Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. I may just have to try and make one. :D
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:iconr603:
R603 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That would be most interesting. :nod:
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Unleashed-Fear Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
not really. :no:
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:iconr603:
R603 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
M'kay. o_o
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Unleashed-Fear Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
._.
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:iconrahiden:
Rahiden Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Huh, interesting.
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R603 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I agree, lol.
After my first costume that I'm basing off of my self moc revamp [After I've made the revamp that is.] I plan on making a suit of Daedric armor and I figured out how to do the red glowing effect on it in real life.
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Vedkarrtheunbroken Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
The torso and head look great, but the forearms and lower legs look a bit odd.
His forearms look too long and the lower legs just do not look like they would go to this moc.
I would try to make some almost elephant/brutish type lower legs, and i would try to create some more subtle shapes on the forearms.

of course these are just opinions, and i still like the moc <;3
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Rahiden Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks. I admit that the arms and legs were a little rushed (I tried not to draw attention to them), but as for choice of pieces, I simply tried to make the lower legs resemble the original's. Still, I have now shortened the lower arms by a stud, so if there are any more updates I might re-take the pictures...
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Alex-Darkrai Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice ^^
I like the head design. The torso is good as well, only the legs seem a little slim, compared to the body.
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